Friday, 3 March 2017

feedback on essay

audio feedback notes:
  • interesting research
  • structurally needs work
  • triangulation = large quotes this needs paraphrasing
  • still dealing with too many historical perspectives
  • argument isn't up too date
  • make comparisons, don't just analyse, compare to modern
  • Hirst = good theme should be used throughout
  • how purposeful is the David analysis
  • think about your images the other 2 are a bit 'iffy'

what to do next after a discussion with Pete:
  • rejig quotes and some content in first essay
  • find a modern example of Mr and Mr's Andrews to compare with in second essay two comparison images can count as one image analysis 
  • do the same with Michelangelo (angel of the north?) or pick this instead of Michelangelo

shorten quotes modernise arguments

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